Is 'Change' a Good Thing or a Bad Thing? (Relate to the origins of art, the agricultural revolution, architecture and urban planning in Mesopotamia and the Indus Valley.)
I think that change is a good thing. Between Mesopotamia and the Indus Valley, they both needed change in order to branch out and become bigger, better civilizations. Between their art, agriculture, architecture, and urban planning change was the best option for them. They needed to improve their art to show other people how to also learn the technique, and so that they could better explain and express themselves. The needed to improve their agriculture for many reasons. They needed better watering systems in order to keep all of their crops, and more, alive and ready to eat/trade/sell. Also, they needed to find better ways to take care of their cattle so that they wouldn't die/starve/be stolen/run away. They needed to improve their architecture in order to improve their up-coming cities and towns. They needed to build bigger and better homes/stores/buildings.Also, they needed to find more material that could possibly make their buildings stronger and more sturdy. Finally, they needed to be able to build buildings faster and easier in able to make sure everyone had a home, a place to work, and a place to shop/trade. Urban planning needed to be changed in order to have well-organized, successful cities. Without planning out jobs, homes, government, etc., people wouldn't be able to function. They also needed a way to be able to trade, therefore they made a money system. All of these reasons are why I think change is good.
a) This is way too brief -- really just a run-on paragraph. It should be formulated into an essay.
ReplyDeleteb) What evidence do you have for any of the things you claim?
c) The prose rambles without any cohesive thought.